Unit 5 Music
Section ⅣWriting——咨询信
咨询信是指写信人就某一个问题向收信人征求或征询建议,希望收信人就写信人提出的问题给出针对性的解决方法或提出合理的建议。
一、基本框架
1.开头——简单叙述写咨询信的目的或意图,清楚表明要寻求什么样的帮助。
2.主体——言明要咨询的具体问题和存在的困难,并请求对方给出一些建议。
3.结尾——诚恳地提出希望,表达需要得到帮助的迫切心情并表示感谢。
二、增分佳句
1.I'm writing to tell you some advice on how to form a music band.
2.Nowadays, both traditional and modern music are enjoyed by people in China.
3.For a long time, traditional music has played an important part in people's life.
4.I was at a loss what to do with this situation.
5.I find it really hard to learn English well and I almost lose heart.
6.I would appreciate it if you could give me some precious advice.
7.I'm sorry to trouble you, but I feel that I must write you this letter.
8.Would you like to give me some advice on it so that I can make rapid progress?
[题目要求]
假如你是李华,你打算与你的朋友组建一个乐队。门基乐队的成功给了你很大的鼓舞。但你和朋友对乐队的名字、主唱、乐器的选择及乐队的类型存在分歧,这让你不知所措,你决定给门基乐队写一封电子邮件,告诉他们你的想法,并征求他们的建议,如何才能使乐队更加成功。
注意:1.可根据内容要点就某一方面或几个方面的问题征求他们的建议;
2.词数100左右。
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第一步:审题构思很关键
一、审题
1.确定体裁:本文为咨询信;
2.确定人称:本文的主要人称应为第一人称;
3.确定时态:本文的主要时态应用一般现在时。
二、构思
开头:自我介绍并提出问题。
主体:具体描述自己遇到的问题、困难等。
结尾:再次提出希望,希望对方给自己提出建议。
第二步:核心词汇想周全
1.form_a_band 组建一个乐队
2.inspire 鼓舞;激励
3.instrument 乐器
4.lead_singer 主唱
5.type_of_music 音乐类型
第三步:由词扩句雏形现
开头:自我介绍并提出问题。
1.我叫李华。我打算与我的三个朋友组建一个乐队。
My name is Li Hua. I'm_going/planning_to_form_a_band with my
three friends.
2.你们(门基)乐队的成功给了我们很大的鼓舞。可是,我们以前没有在乐队里待过。
Your band's success inspired us greatly. However, we
have_never_been_in_a_band_before.
3.你能给我们一些建议吗?
Could you please give_us_some_advice/suggestions?
主体:具体描述自己遇到的问题、困难等。
4.我们都喜欢流行音乐,但是我和我的三个朋友无法决定给乐队取什么名字,谁主唱以及选择什么样的乐器等。
My three friends and I like pop music. We can't decide the band's
name. We can't decide the lead singer. We can't decide what_instruments
_we_choose.
5.此外,我们该演奏什么样的音乐?我们是该只演奏一种音乐还是各种音乐都尝试一下呢?
In_addition/Besides,_what type of music should we play? Should we only play one kind or try_every_type_of_music?
6.你们乐队是如何决定演奏什么的呢?
How did your band decide what_to_play?
结尾:再次提出希望,希望对方给自己提出建议。
7.我们真的希望你们能给我们一些建议。
We really hope you can give_us_some_advice.
第四步:句式升级造亮点
1.用but, as well as等把句4合并成一个含转折关系的并列句
My_three_friends_and_I_like_pop_music,_but_we_can't_decide_the_band's_name,
_the_lead_singer_as_well_as_what_instruments_we_choose.
2.对句7的谓语部分进行强调
We_do_hope_you_can_give_us_some_advice.
第五步:过渡衔接联成篇
Dear_Monkees,
My_name_is_Li_Hua._I'm_going_to_form_a_band_with_my_three_friends._Your_ban d's_success_inspired_us_greatly._However,_we_have_never_been_in_a_band_before._C ould_you_please_give_us_some_advice/suggestions?
My_three_friends_and_I_like_pop_music,_but_we_can't_decide_the_band's_name, _the_lead_singer_as_well_as_what_instruments_we_choose._In_addition/Besides,_wha t_type_of_music_should_we_play?_Should_we_only_play_one_kind_or_try_every_type_o f_music?_How_did_your_band_decide_what_to_play?
We_do_hope_you_can_give_us_some_advice.
Yours_hopefully,
Li_Hua