Summary:
1、 每段首句空四个（四个字母）。 2、 可数名词和不可数名词混淆：
have a good health 3、 重复、累赘：It is very
important to have a good health. If we have a good health, 4、 多义词词性混淆：we will be
hard to do anything 5、 句子结构过长，该断句时不断
句：There are many ways to keep fit. For example, eating, you have to pay attention to your eating habit, we have three meals one day. 6、 人称应保持一致
7、 单词拼写：cant, runing, go for
a walk often eating (粗心！！) 8、 连接词误用：Don’t eat so 9、 10、11、12、
much junk food. Because it will gain your weight. 中文式英语：Because it will
gain your weight. 定语从句：For me, I often go
for a walk often eating, it can keep my weight. 句子不连贯：For me, I often go
for a walk often eating, it can keep my weight. Everybody. Take actions! 三段作文写成四段 Good Health
As our society’s development, the life of people become more and more enrich. Therefor, the key of keeping good life is good health. As we known, we can’t do anything well without good helth. So it’s very important to keep fit.
Many people keep fit through doing more exercise. Certainly, that’s good advice. And then we should eat something “Green-Food”. For example, some vegetable, it contains rich vitami. What’s more, we should have healthy psychological when we face to huge compete pressure.
As to me, I often go to walk with my classmates at nightfall. This way is not only practice our body, but also increase our friendship. however, I keep eating three meals on time. Of cause, good sleep especially important.
In a word, we should have good health whatever environment we lived.
主要问题： 1、 同上。
2、 写作为正式体，尽量使用正式用于，
不用缩写：So it’s very important to
keep fit. 3、 第三人称单数 4、 单词拼写错误过多 5、 连接词乱用
6、 Not only …but also…错用
Good Health
As we know, it is important for us to have a good health. First, good health is the base to make our lives happy. Secondly, by good health we can do something we want. you know, having bad health can’t do everything. Above all, we need good health.
There are many ways to keep fit. I think there are two way are the most effective. One is to eat healthy. The other one is to do more sports. Through this ways, we can keep ourselves fit and healthy.
In order to keep good health, I do this things everyday…I have a variety lunch. There are vegetable, meat, rice, fish and some drink…I hope everyone can do something to keep fit. because good healt is realy very important for us.
思路清晰、结构完整并符合要求、
语言表达规范、准确。但句子结构不够简洁。字数过多，文章最后部分错误较多，说明是匆忙结尾（没能把握好时间）。