第二段：我们准备出游(trip)，然而我和我的弟弟david都不愿意出发，因为下一次再见到我们的朋友们就不知道什么时候了。然而这一天还是到了。我们带上了帐篷，野营设备，
出发了。但过了两小时后我们不得不返回家中，因为妈妈忘记带上了钱包等。
第三段：途中我和弟弟去加油站上厕所是我们胆战心惊的事--妈妈开车，爸爸在睡觉。弟弟去厕所我就得在门口放哨，我去厕所弟弟要放哨。我们知道妈妈会说：“Honey, where
are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.”
第四段：我们出游的第四第五个晚上，我们找不到空缺的酒店，妈妈提议我们到某个人的院子里搭帐篷。我和弟弟都很紧张，还好爸爸否决了这个提议。然而妈妈并不明白为什么我们会反对，若有其他人敲响我们家的门 ，我妈妈一定会非常乐意的。她认为所有人都和她一样nice.终于我们找到了一个空缺。
对今年续写题型的粗浅看法：
今年的续写与以前两次不一样，出现了标题，也不是遇险了。初看文章有些地方情节不太顺畅。比如在第五段，作者表明他们不喜欢用帐篷，可是第六段的段首句说：The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.我们记起了我们已经带来的帐篷。衔接不太自然啊。但这里也就给考生提供了更为广阔的想象空间。怎样更为合理？
本次续写发挥空间比较大。比如续写第一段，说记起了帐篷，那后面我们会围绕帐篷展开一些话题。（当然也可能不这样处理）按照“妈妈”健忘以及好心的性格特点，预测会发生一些有趣的事。估计会产生一些问题，然后这些问题解决了。因为续写第二段段首句表明他们顺利经过几个州，而且沿途欣赏美丽的景色，说明第一段结束的时候，一切进展顺利。 \and saw lots of great sights along the way.\
续写第二段段首语，明显画风变了，”saw lots of great sights along the way\有心情欣赏美景了。之前是令人烦恼的，那么之后是令人快乐的。在优美的景色里，上演他们家人之间美妙的事。这里就需要考生发挥足够的想象力。考
虑到文章第一句话I had an interesting childhood，最后一段要不要首尾呼应一下，说明会发生怎样interesting。文章最终体现的主题应该是亲情，是爱。 2.写作思路：（仅供参考）
审要求：阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。明确作文是读后续写。 审体裁：记叙文 审时态：一般过去时 审前文大意以及要点 who: Mum Dad David I when: when I was eleven
where : to Colorado and North Dakota what: One strange family trip
why:to spent a few weeks driving to those states to visit my two sets of grandparents; to see all the sights along the way
审续写所给首句：仔细研读细细题目给出的第一句话，有助于我们编写后续故事时与前文叙述的高度融合。
续写段首1： The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. 抓住段首句设问：
Why did they remember the tent? What would they do with the tent?
What would happen to the brand-new tent? What would Mum do ? How would they feel ?
续写段首2： We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. 抓住段首句设问：
What sights would they see ? What did the sights look like? What would they do ? What would Mum do ?
At the end of the story , how did they feel ? Why? 3.写作关键点
这次续写可以着重从叙事、心理感受、以及场景等方面入手。根据所给关键词建立情节与内容支架，根据“协同效应”原理，注意语言协同与内容协同。 叙事: forgetful nice
心理变化：annoyed, nervous, relieved, happy 场景：messy, normal, great 4. 写作注意点
融洽性、逻辑性、想象的合理性、时态、书写等 读后续写优秀学生现场作文1
Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we must make full use of it since we had brought it. David and I looked at Dad, hoping he could stop her crazy idea. To our great disappointment, he agreed. We spent a whole afternoon seeking a nicecamping place and set up our tent before the night fell. It was the first time that I had thought mom could be wise as I admiring our stunning tent.
“Oh, I forgot the pillows!” what a misconception. Despite the ache of my neck, we had some great nights.
Para1: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The bright blue sky, the limitless green grass, the group of sheep, the
setting sun and the countless stars in the curtain of nights kept me spellbound. Not only did we see the picturesque scenery, we also managed to consider mom’s scandals as a kind of fun.I reaaly love my Mum.
To our relief, we arrived at grandparents’ place and went back to our home with all of four people. It was so fortunate to see my friends again. 余同学习作
习作点评
这篇文章的构思很好。第一段的第二句话与第一句话衔接自然 Mom insisted that we must make full use of it since we had brought it.他们记起了新买的帐篷，母亲坚持要好好利用帐篷。之后他们玩得很好，直到晚上，健忘的妈妈忘记带枕头了。这里就体现了这个可爱的妈妈的特性。不过第一段最后作者话锋一转，说睡得很好，这样就顺接到了续写第二段段首句的表达。情节设计合情合理。
续写第二段的第二句话描写了美丽的景观，文字简洁，但表现极为丰富The bright blue sky, the limitless green grass, the group of sheep, the setting sun and the countless stars in the curtain of nights kept me spellbound.
在这种美好的景色里，我们心情很好，妈妈的那些事儿都不是事儿，还蛮开心的。Not only did we see the picturesque scenery, we also managed to consider mom’s scandals as a kind of fun.而且还表达了作者对母亲的爱。
总体评价： 该作文与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。情节合理，内容丰富，细节描写到位，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意思表达。建议得分23分。
读后续写优秀学生现场作文2
Para1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we brought with us. We decided to campalong the river throughout the town. The views there were surpassingly beautiful--the warm sunshine, the fresh air, the clean water. We sat on the grass, hooked by the splendid nature. However, when Dad was about to put up our tent, it suddenly hit him that Mom again, had left it completely, as well as the camping equipment in the hotel. Speechlessly, Dad had to go back to fetch them to continue our camping.
Para2: We drove through several states and saw lots of sights along the way.
Every time we got to a new place, Mom would cheer up like a child. Calling out David and I, she got off the car, laughed and danced around. She held our hands in her hands, leading us around the big city, the small town and the nice nature. When we came back to the hotel after the tiring but excellent visit, she would hug us and kiss us on our faces. How sweet she was!
Absent-minded and forgetful as she was, she never forgot to express her love to us. 李同学提供习作