格式:
to:
name time/date
message:
body
Signature (initial) / message taken by “name”
Example: p14 写分
语气:因为是写给sales manager, 可能是你的上司, 也可能不是; 但从题目看来, 你应该是一个buyer(buy some software for your department), 由此推断你跟写信的对方, 至少不是同一个department, 并且是请求;因此,语气相对的要客气, formal. 内容点顺序:这里,应该先解释了为什么需要samples才提出要求---2-1-3
第二个(2nd) 内容点:
As you might know, (不会太突兀,适当的承接词可以给你加印象分)Microsoft, our software provider (是用同位语,让你的文章更商务, 给人的感觉更严谨),has shown (换词)some interest in our laser printers.
1st&3rd内容点:
for this selling opportunities/ with this purpose (承接词), I would be thankful if I can have your permission for taking(换词) some product brochures (20) [business思路,先把主要的东西说出来, 次要的东西方后面] plus (换词) sample printers (a1, a2,a3)[表示不同型号] at 3 pm on Wednesday, 15th,October(事件的表达). 对时间, 还可以用by, before.
或者你对长句没信心,可以把上面分成两个句子
and if I can have the items at , that would be an advantage/important/crucial/vital for the presentation.